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2024-11-23 09:13:42
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回答1:

题目Some people feel that entertainers are paid too much money.
Do you agree or disagree ?

The issue of make salaries has been an on-going debate for quite some time in the contemporary world among office workers. Meanwhile , whether the high-paid should be gained by entertainment business has aroused heated discussion . Entertainers' emolument , as I see it , could never be administered too much.

However , among all the convincing reasons , the one which should be stressed is that many ordinary people who work in the medical domain , education domain and research domain services to the society have been immense , but they acquire less money than entertainers . Even some stars attain a large amount of payment has exceed Nobel prize , this is inequitable .

Furthermore , convincing argument can be made that it appears a sea of individuals probably give up school study and pursue to obtain a mass of wage much easier like the entertainment stars . Although there are a good deal of ordinary profession have as talents who require special skills as those stars and possess years of edcation and special training , the resuit is often inequitable . The full-time students are doubtful of accepted effect of aesthetic education when they discovered the circs ,this is bad to culture newcomers .

Unfortunately, people are beclouded as a result of they only seeing stars of fun won a lot of money whenas deleted they brought pleasures , make them have a hundred-percent rest and a well-liking lifestyle from own memory. For example , the olympic champion Liuxiang won his 6th National Title at the 2006 National Athletics championship , quite an exciting match .

In conclusion , I think there may be some resons why entertainment stars earn high salaries but overall I agree that they are overpaid . Government should impose heavy taxes and putting the money given to people who deserver the earning . In this way ,I believe that those talents who making a stupendous contribution to society will getting a phychological balance and more devotion his work ,can reduced the negative influence also .应该打10分 有些地方还需修改

回答2:

语法错误太多 而且都是很低级的语法错误 雅思作文给你5.5分